Friday Fictioneers: The Messenger


Copyright-Al Forbes

The facade of the government building was crumbling. The new President called it a disgrace. Too bad he was yet unfamiliar with intrigue.

He suggested an artist to do the work. Security failed to mention their concerns; They didn’t want to start off on the wrong foot.

New parapets were put in place. And then the decorative headpiece was added.

If you could get closer you would see one nostril conceals a camera watching everyone come and go. The support holding it up connects to the presidential office with a listening device. And one pupil expertly hides a transmitter.

Yes, Mercury is still a messenger.


As always, writers are encouraged to be as innovative as possible with the prompt and 100 word constraints. 

Henry David Thoreau said it best.

“It’s not what you look at that matters, it’s what you see.”

THE CHALLENGE:  Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)

THE KEY:  Make every word count.

This is one of the writing challenges I have enjoyed of the past couple of months. If you are interested in joining in, follow the link above and have fun.


39 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: The Messenger

    • Moon Dust,

      When I am considering whether to write for these challenges I will usually click on the picture. Often you can get a much closer look. If you do the same you will see that there was a remodel with a few crumbling old parts left behind. But what really caught my eye was the nostrils were slightly different. Then I noticed same thing with the eyes. Finally I realized it had an extension going towards the window inside the sill. (Who needs creativity when the picture tells its own story?)

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

    • Thanks Doug,

      I mentioned to one of the other comments that I debated the word yes in that last line. Still debating it in my own mind. But many of you spoke of it well so I guess its best included.

      Charles W. Short

    • Hello Rochelle,

      Pastor Chip, Micro Chip or just plain Chip. You can call me about anything. I greatly enjoy these challenges and appreciate your doing them.

      Thanks for reading and commenting.

      Pastor Chip

  1. I like that Mercury is still the messenger, and your clever set up to make it so. It made me grin, and that’s good thing on a chilly Friday.

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